Gods be damned of these curses,
Curses of fiery hell and torment,
Torment unending, ceaseless;
Ceaseless in its pursuit of vengeance,
Vengeance of the dark machinations that plague my mind!
O devilish machinations that haunt,
Haunt me why, I ask not this fate,
Fate most sorrowful and in agony;
Agony night after night when I slumber,
Slumber I know not, only do I receive nightmares!
Nightmares of dread,
Dread in the vulnerable mind,
Mind, Soul and Body Ravaged;
Ravaged by the demons that dwell unseen,
Unseen who's intentions are most mischievous.
Mischievous nightmares who distort my memories,
Memories of my family now seen with corpses and blood,
Blood that stains my shaking perception of the world;
World gone mad with nuclear fire,
Fire and drive thy mind to insanity!
Yes, insanity is all that remains here,
Here in my ill-percieved visions,
Visions that damn me more and more as into them I peer;
Peer helplessly against my will,
Will sapped away as these nightmares am I forced to embrace!
Night after night embrace these demons am I condemned,
Condemned to repeat it again and again till the dawn,
Dawn that brings only half-hearted salvation;
Salvation that never lasts for at the rise of dusk returns the hell,
Hell that is the curse I call a nightmare!
Prettyflour here on behalf of
I haven't read anything like this! I love the way you used the last word of each line to begin the next. A very cool idea which you executed brilliantly. The repitition worked really well to eccenate the horror feel. And, it kept a nice cadence throughout.
Clever, interesting and nicely written. I honestly have no constructive critisicm to offer.
Thank you and have a great day!
I'm happy to hear you truly fancied it
My thanks for point this out, I will keep it in mind for future reference
My immediate response upon reading this piece was simply "Wow."
Phenomenal, impressive, bravo. I cannot critique anything here. This poem was amazing!
I will point out, however, what I did enjoy so much about it... and that was your Technique. Using the last word of each line to begin the next made this poem flow absolutely seamlessly, and it was very clever and made for a very enjoyable read. I do hope to see more of your works in the future. Well done!
Right off, the aspect that attracted me was the Poe-etical diction, no puns, to your poem. Very like Poe's works that I read till now. Good style for a poem on horror subjects. The development and arrangement of stanzas was well made too. The two first stanzas were much like oratory and perhaps like Milton's style. Perhaps you read both authors in school. Good job, this.
I'f afraid i'm not familiar with this Milton character right off the top of my head. What did he write?